It was hot. Temperatures sizzled
into triple digits when a lukewarm rain began to mingle with her sweat.
Beth’s hair was a matted mess as she boarded the 727 bus to LA. Wishing
she had never put on the cheap mascara, she caught a horrid glimpse of
herself as she passed the side mirror. At least her clothes got a good washing.
Passengers glared, visibly upset the driver stopped at all. This was an unscheduled stop—a Dead Stop, abandoned, invisible on any other day. "You're picking up ghosts, Larry!" someone shouted from the back. "There’s not even an ad on the bench."
The bus driver, not a patient man and rather portly, complained vigorously. “Yeah, I know! It isn't on my route either!”
The bus driver, not a patient man and rather portly, complained vigorously. “Yeah, I know! It isn't on my route either!”
“Yet, here you are,” Beth scoffed, looking for an open seat.
He was quite puzzled himself. “Yeah, well you better keep those kids quiet.” He pointed a stubby crooked finger
at her, invading her personal space.
Beth could feel those “Grapes of Wrath” about to spew from her lips with teeth ready to bite that finger off. She
and her kids were hungry, suddenly homeless, and she was relieved of her school bus driver job ... for the second time. But she restrained
herself while laboring up the last step with a baby seat dangling in one hand, and
gently pushing her 4-year-old into the bus with the other. If words are
weapons, the driver had an arsenal, which he used as he picked up Beth’s army
duffle bag—unaware of the baby bottle falling out the side pocket—and flung the bag with her life in it, onto the overhead bars. There was hardly room for the
three of them and as tired and frazzled as she was she wound up having to stand in the aisle.
This must be the bus to hell. "Chivalry really is dead," she mumbled.
This must be the bus to hell. "Chivalry really is dead," she mumbled.
The hour-long ride didn’t go well. The bus leaked through three rusty holes and rattled like its wheels were square; The baby was hungry; she couldn't find his bottle; and her 4-year-old thought
he would practice his new words while kneeling on the worn-out leather … out
loud, in sentences that only made sense to him—cute perhaps any other time, but
it was 100 degrees and this rain wouldn’t get anyone to work on time. He was
scolded twice by a passenger with pasty pale skin and sunken eyeballs but mostly ignored by the others, who, Beth noticed, weren't in much better shape.
Finally arriving at their
destination exactly an hour later, Beth’s struggles continued: The baby cried—no
doubt hungry; she fought with her duffle bag, which was stuck under someone’s briefcase,
and her busy 4-year-old (who decided to say goodbye to each and every one of
the passengers, and something about Jesus) didn’t want to get off the bus.
Never mind the rain, which now pounded the streets of LA leaving puddles of murky
mud in fresh potholes.
No one offered assistance and the
driver began checking his watch. That’s when the massive iron bell of
the church tower struck once, in time with the distant thunder. She was late, she
was stressed out, and as usual, in a hurry but getting nowhere.
As best she could, Beth
straightened out on the second step and blew out a defiant sigh. “Come on,
Caleb! Hang onto the elephant’s tail.” She laughed nervously as Caleb offered his
best baby elephant trumpet snuffle puff, which came out more like a “ppffft.”
He hung onto his mother’s shirt as if his life depended on it. And it very well
could have.
Passengers were not amused but at
this point, she didn’t care and heaved her duffle bag through the accordion door
into the rain. It struck a stray dog who yelped and ran for cover under the newspaper
stand.
Poor Caleb barely got his little
snuffle-puff arm out of the bus when the driver closed the door scraping the
child’s elbow. He cried, but no apology from the driver. Beth scowled and swore
men like him would get their just reward. That’s when the bus swerved to avoid
a cycler who made a rude gesture as he rode by just before the bus came to a
grinding halt. Burning rubber filled the already pungent air.
Beth crunched her shoulders, her
face, and cupped her hands over her mouth. Slightly lifting one foot off the
ground, she whispered, “Oops, my bad,” and hurried through the stone archway of
the English gardens surrounding The Grand Seville. And suddenly ... her world turned into Narnia. Well, not exactly, though she did take a quick look behind her to see if there was a wardrobe or any other portal not of this earth.
Grandpa Seth had told her of this place. "Close your eyes," he would say. "God dwells ... even in LA."
She would giggle. "Not in LA, Grandpa."
The pristine gardens greeted them with a cool breeze, snowy blossoms free-falling from a clear sky, and mourning doves cooing.
They sat for a while on a white
garden bench under a weeping willow that beckoned them with outstretched arms.
“Mommy, the tree moved,” Caleb
whispered as he pulled on Beth’s arm.
“It’s the breeze. Don’t you worry.” She
looked over her shoulder and checked the pounding rain outside the arches. Then scanning the branches and the trunk beneath them, she made sure the tree wasn’t moving. A strange
peace descended from every limb. Caleb had let go of her arm catching blossoms and sipping its dewdrops. "Be careful, Caleb."
Again she checked outside the stone archway. Again she heard the driving force of a storm that couldn't find its way into the garden where a soothing mist caressed red roses and kissed a sea of golden daffodils. She searched for the baby bottle while puffing unruly strands of hair from her face.
"I'm so sorry, Daniel. Mommy doesn't know what happened to your bottle." She held her baby close, the car seat nestled between her legs.
"Mommy, my elbow hurts." Caleb wiped a tear off his brown skin.
"Well ... stop chasing those blossoms. Come here." She kissed him on top of his curly head. It took a second or two till all was well at the mention of ice cream but only after their meeting with Grandpa Seth’s lawyer. "Oh, the meeting!" Beth sighed.
The soft showers on fresh grass did wonders for her soul, as did the coos of her baby boy after she gave him a pacifier dripping with fresh blossom water. She didn't want to leave the garden as time seemed to have stopped among the fountains and the daffodils. The chaos of the world, she so desperately sought reprieve from, drifted away. Nonetheless, it was time to face the music and the family who had disowned her.
"I'm so sorry, Daniel. Mommy doesn't know what happened to your bottle." She held her baby close, the car seat nestled between her legs.
"Mommy, my elbow hurts." Caleb wiped a tear off his brown skin.
"Well ... stop chasing those blossoms. Come here." She kissed him on top of his curly head. It took a second or two till all was well at the mention of ice cream but only after their meeting with Grandpa Seth’s lawyer. "Oh, the meeting!" Beth sighed.
The soft showers on fresh grass did wonders for her soul, as did the coos of her baby boy after she gave him a pacifier dripping with fresh blossom water. She didn't want to leave the garden as time seemed to have stopped among the fountains and the daffodils. The chaos of the world, she so desperately sought reprieve from, drifted away. Nonetheless, it was time to face the music and the family who had disowned her.
Still drenched, clothes disheveled, and hair plastered to her face, Beth entered The Grand Seville, a cathedral-like structure
left from yesteryears. It took her breath away. She wondered how modern society
had built around it, almost ignoring its grandeur and its very existence. Or
maybe The Grand Seville had ignored modern society. Grandpa Seth loved this
place and wrote a book about it. But no one read it except for Beth even though she and the rest of Grandpa's family could never find The Grand Seville's location.
"But you see, my Bethany," she could hear Grandpa say. "One can only find it when one is given a special invitation."
"But you see, my Bethany," she could hear Grandpa say. "One can only find it when one is given a special invitation."
Inside the lobby two
chiseled ladies of ivory, holding a water pot with a steady flow of
sparkling water, graced each side of the ornate elevator doors. As soon as she
took out her invitation the doors slid open with a soft hiss revealing the elegant palatial décor inside and a man she thought was yet another statue.
“Good morning, Ms. Beth, I’m
Gabe.” He stood tall and straight, eyes sparkling, and not a strand of hair out of place. “We’ve been waiting
for you.” The elevator operator adjusted his dark blue vest that stretched a
little tight over a crisp white shirt. His tie matched his pants—his shiny gray pants with not a wrinkle in sight. “May I be of assistance?” She hesitated
but he already had her duffle bag over his shoulder and without much effort
picked up the bulky car seat where baby Daniel finally lay fast asleep.
“He must be so hungry.” Beth shook her head.
“You just fed him, didn’t you?”
Gabe pointed to the empty baby bottle in her hand.
She raised her eyebrows, then hung her head. “Oh, I’m
losing it ... again.”
He handed her a warm moist hand
towel. She cleaned her face as best she could as Gabe led them into the elevator. The ride up was like a smooth sail on Grandpa's yacht. It refreshed her tired body—another chance to rest, which was rare. Her muscles unknotted as she slumped onto a chair appearing from nowhere and felt like a cloud of marshmallows.
Again, time stopped, or so she thought, giving her extra precious minutes of respite. Once or twice, when she gazed into the smokey mirror that covered the elevator wall, she witnessed the shadow of wings protruding from Gabe’s back. She rubbed her eyes. Grandpa had told her many stories of his angel encounters. Great stories, she thought. She had made him a promise to believe … one day. Never should she have promised him that. Caleb on the other hand had no problem believing.
Again, time stopped, or so she thought, giving her extra precious minutes of respite. Once or twice, when she gazed into the smokey mirror that covered the elevator wall, she witnessed the shadow of wings protruding from Gabe’s back. She rubbed her eyes. Grandpa had told her many stories of his angel encounters. Great stories, she thought. She had made him a promise to believe … one day. Never should she have promised him that. Caleb on the other hand had no problem believing.
Out the
elevator doors, that strange peace beyond her understanding, and a little too disturbing for her taste, sprinkled about like fairy dust.
Gabe politely asked for her
invitation and brought her in front of the massive double doors—reddish oak, sparkling as if fireflies had set up residence. “The penthouse conference
room.” He pulled out a colorful Band-Aid® from his vest
pocket and gently covered Caleb’s scraped elbow. “There you go, young man.”
Beth returned the towel, trading it for a brush and hair tie, for which she was grateful.
“I must leave you here,” Gabe said. “Duty calls.”
Beth returned the towel, trading it for a brush and hair tie, for which she was grateful.
“I must leave you here,” Gabe said. “Duty calls.”
Very interesting.
ReplyDeleteThanks Melissa.
DeleteVery engaging! I hung on each word. You are very good at painting the picture of what’s happening. I felt like I was there feeling very pain and discomfort of this mom. And I was just as irritated with the driver as she was!
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DeleteThanks so much for the feedback Marcie. It gives me incentive to keep writing.
DeleteOoh, this is great!!
ReplyDeleteI'm all giggles. LOL. Thanks Jessica.
DeleteI enjoyed this!
ReplyDeleteThanks Julie.
DeleteLooking forward to chapter 2.
ReplyDeleteOh yay! I was waiting for this comment. LOL ... It's coming soon. Thanks Beth.
DeleteDefinitely makes me want to know what happens next!
ReplyDeleteAwesome!! What happens next is coming soon.
DeleteI'm intrigued.
ReplyDeleteOh I like that. ;)
DeleteI'm envious of your ability to write descriptive scenes and take us on a journey to fantasy-like places. My critical eye did spot a typo, though, plus a few places left me confused--is this reality or fantasy? Still, this being your first draft, I see its potential to be a satisfying story that, knowing you, will have some important truth woven into it.
DeleteI feel so bad for the lead character! She has a difficult time, and she manages it so gracefully. The people on the bus are awful. I'm intrigued by the magical new place, wondering what's going to happen. I can feel the grit of the piece and the emotion of the characters - always good when writing fiction!
ReplyDeleteThanks Melinda. Those are wonderful words of encouragement. It's good to feel I'm on the right track, so to speak.
DeleteLooking forward to chapter two. Love the picture evoked by the Narnia parallel and the line "God dwells even in LA. Love your idea of posting chapters to keep with your 500 words a day goal. Keep it up!
ReplyDeleteAh, thanks Candice. Feels like I'm on the right track when I read comments like yours. Very encouraging.
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